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Chapter 5?

Wasn't there a Chapter 5 to this story, or am I wrong? Please write more!

Chapter 2 please???

Love it waiting for next chapter. I like the story line too!

Parawa,
Your writing demonstrates all the best of restraint, in all of its meanings. You caress us with the subtlety of descriptions and characterizations. With no intent to do so, you shame those who grab us readers by the throat and hold our heads below the surface of their excess.

Bravo(a)

More from Internet

Great writing. Will you be giving us more on the challenges from the Internet? Not really enthrall with Cate attached so closely to her office people. Would like to see more out in the public and more stranger sex. Hope to see more about Cate really soon.

Man this is a fun story

Really loving Sessia, and especially it's #1 slave, Diane, and her cute reactions to her oh-so-sexy torments. Thanks for writing!

I'd be hunting this Pluto character with my .357... or maybe a longsword. :P

So wonderful to find a male character in a BDSM story who I can actually relate to. 5/5. Onwards to Ch02!

Fantastic!

This was a great story, quite depraved, but I loved it. I love any kind of "system" of femdom, like a femdom society, club, or religion where femdom is taken as fact. I wasn't a fan of the poop/piss stuff, but I could scroll past that quite easily.

Others have commented that this story is offensive or bad, but you're writing in a niche market and doing so very well. My guess is that the negative comments come from people who simply don't appreciate this type of material, so please don't let their negativity impede your very good writing.

Getting Better

I thought the first chapter was boring but now it is getting better.It makes me want to keep reading.

I want to stay in the same hotel as Diane!

Being able to see a naked slave-girl spanked every morning would be a great enticement to get me to stay at the Hotel Castello. Obviously I can't do that, but it's lovely to see your ability to describe Diane's pain and humiliation in intimate detail.

Ugh. Comments.

First of all, great, great chapter. The evolving of the roles is perfect. I completely get where she's coming from and his possessiveness. That he stopped her from exiting the kitchen and from panicking and demanded her submission is what dominance is all about. It's not submission when you choose to give it only when you feel like it. It has to be demanded if needed. People push the boundaries, especially when they're stressed. I prefer his reaction a thousand times more than letting it all crumble then rebuild the structure later, dealing with the mess. If she can't count on him to be dominant when she most needs it, when she most challenges it, then why bother submitting in the first place?
With that said, I wouldn't appreciate the shift of relationship dynamics and the serious conversation while put on display and performing for partner, because this would put me at most vulnerable and in need of protection. So whatever he demanded at that point, well, it would be either accept it or run for the hills type of situation for me. It's like discussing the limits while high on drugs or alcohol or high on endorphins or just horny as hell. Which, in this case, was indeed the case. Sorry, this part is really questionable. For me, of course. :) There's a fine line between pushing and pushing too far. Submissives have a tough job finding the difference as well, but I always fall back on my instincts. And obviously, this girl's instincts told her she could trust him. So she does. He never did anything out of what she wanted anyway, the fact that they were discovered was an incident and since she was distressed, she wouldn't let him calm her down any other way than he did. Everyone is different and this woman's needs go far beyond what most of us are comfortable with. Let's take fisting for example. I don't want it, I don't read about it, it reminds me too much of a childbirth and that wasn't a good experience for me, so that's a hard limit for me personally. With that said, I gave it a chance two times in my life, namely to read about it. With Cherise Sinclair and you. Both times I got it. I got what the characters found attractive about it, both times I found it believable and possible. Don't know if you've read Sinclair, but in my eyes the comparison alone should be taken as a compliment. :)
The possessiveness that people had much problem with, I find attractive, the integral part of what taking submission and dominance to a new level. It takes a lot to trust someone, it takes a whole lot more to give yourself to them on such high level. And in return, the man SHOULD feel possessive and protective. I think he was way inside the line of what was appropriate, especially with interaction with another male character (referring to the restaurant here). The play underneath the table was pushing her limits, not stating his claim, and even if he did, there's nothing wrong with it! If only more men did that, because along with that comes huge responsibility for the one claimed. Isn't belonging to someone the eternal wish of a submissive?! Why is that a problem then? Think. It's how you've been raised, it's what your parents wanted you to believe, that you're independent, that you're emancipated, that you can do it all alone and be proud of it! No one, NO ONE told us how good it would be to give yourself to another human being, to let go of all your inhibitions and to feel whatever you want to feel! No one told us how impossibly fulfilling it would be to get that level care and nurture in return, that level that can only be achieved my the dominant frame of mind, because in order to be able to push you to leave your inhibitions behind, the Dom has to know you better than you do yourself. If he cares enough to get to that level, well he certainly cares enough to nurture you when you need it. Of course we can do it all alone, but do we really have to? Do we want to?

JaH, you've explained better or should I say differently than anyone else so far, what it means to progress from a Dom to a Master in a relationship. I loved it. But... Doesn't that collide with her hard limit to not be a slave? Maybe I remember wrong, but I think she said she doesn't want that. If I'm mistaken, please forgive me. Because calling someone a Master implies he could call her slave in return, whether he does or doesn't is irrelevant, because the state of mind is certainly the same. Apparently I need to read on, lol... :) Great, great job. You kept me on edge the whole time.

Good story, but I don't get doing a stranger in a bar as erotic. Oral spreads nasty stuff, too. Doing Master at the bar would be cool. Thanks for the story.

Ahhh

There is a special way Lit wants sections of different text, such as italics or bold, marked. It must be marked at the beginning and end of the passage. I think it is described within the rules for submission. I know authors who have grumped about the clunkiness of the process. :-/

By the by, there are several stories I've encountered that would have benefitted from being presented in Comic Sans. Quite a few lately.

Ohhhh goooood...

JAH, I have to say, the exchange outside the restaurant, omg... The sexiest thing ever! The subspace... the way you described it, it makes perfect sense, although I've never seen it described quite the same! Sooo good! And the whipping scene, again. Wow. It's interesting how we can recreate (and reread) the intimacy and the sensations of a certain event over and over again and good writers like yourself just make it seem new and special. Good job!

Epic Font Failure

FA_JF-
When I co-wrote this story with Miss kitten, I had each section (mine and hers) in a different font. My part was all Arial (I believe) and hers was all in italics in Roman. When I put it in here, it all got converted into the same font. I understand why they do that, for clarity and common sense. After all, who wants to read erotica written in Comic Sans? But it does aggravate me just a little I didn't anticipate that and prepare. Ah, well....

Darn it

Sorry, Rex. I missed this amongst all that swill that clogged the board.

F/F doesn't do much for me, unfortunately, but that's me. As a written work it is once again top notch. The caring and a spoonful of fun that Master and Kitten demonstrate are perfect for the scene. Quite a 'taste' of the life they gave this newbie.

As a nit pick, the difference between Master and Kitten could be better differentiated. A few times I read something twice to be sure I understood which character it was.


MJ and Jbeans....here's ya some tasty F/F action. Come an' get it! ;)

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