A wholehearted...

five *s from me. Short, sweet and a lot of affection in this scene. Look forward to hearing more from you. Take care...

First gut reaction is that Tina has gone off the rails.
What will whatisname do now?

I should have been working

I should have been working when I saw that you added another chapter. Thank you for the perfect distraction! Wonderful. Well written - of course. Keep the chapters coming.

Mixed reaction

I like your writing style, but I find her to be a silly girl playing dangerously. Any feelings of excitement at the situations are derailed by concern for him. That she is new to this is the point, so I am left to think that is at least part of your intent. It's like riding in the car with my teenager driving, I am waiting for the collision.

Sweet, hot little story. Thanks new author. Look forward to more.

The story is intense to it's own detriment. The effort to follow through the maze reduces the enjoyment. But perhaps that is part of the plan?

Yes.

Thanks, bbw. Yes, there is more... :)

A marvellous story!

Thank you for sharing it with us - very well done - five stars.

no doubt (3)

just let him find his balls and fuck both A and Licia, or the others as well, untile they beg him to stop. This is utterly crazy. Where do you get your inspiration? from the Hot Marijke tales ???

Leaving aside

the fact that someone is going to end up hurt some day with this much abandonment in dangerous situations, I enjoy your writing.

I love your work

you are a great storyteller ...

FYI you had her drinking coffee then going out for coffee why wouldn't she just make some for him?

no doubt (2)

again, but ... it's a lot of bullshit and not even funny. I know I don't have to read it but I've nothing else to do at the moment.

no doubt

you're an excellent writer, but ....

nice

Hot story. is there more?

More to Cum..

Just submitted chapter two, let's see how long it takes to go from "pending" to "approved." :) And sorry for the cliffhanger. I'm a jerk sometimes.