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Yes, Same for me.

I am a guy, I did the deflowering and my gf of the time was brave enough to say, "That wasn't too good for me." She did add however, "We need to practice. Lots!" and we did and I reckon I got better, we both did.
Thank you for a really clever poem.

Loved the poem

I really enjoyed the poem, and your voice is perfect for it. I felt the reading, however, was too rushed. Still, high marks!

Slaps 1201 with a trout

Same old story? I agree about the lines quoted by 12, though. And I like this one, too: "tying my mind to his urgency".

Nice

If I were permitted to play with this one I would change 'mouldable' to mailable for the layers of meaning as well as for the IMO better sound of the word.

The double use of each bothers me as well I would change the second line beginning with each to 'of stunning beauty'. Again layers of meaning.

I'm more reluctant to share changes I'd make to poetry just because subtle word changes can change the feel of the piece but in this case I couldn't resist. Hope you understand it's coming from a place of sharing rather than critique.

Decent poem but great finish

The last for lines save this from mediocrity. If the rest were as good it would be at least a 4 and possibly a 5. As it stands a decent 3.

Quite good!

Loved the lines...

raise a glass to procrastination
And clink to that somnolent state

And

We'll rejoice in our foibles and missteps
'til there's no more whiskey to pour.

Solid 4

Sorry one more thing.

The next to the last line doesn't quite fit. Since it sounds like she/he's in the process of ending the dry spell something like...

My/our dry spell had lasted too long.

Would work better.

Text and audio didn't match up for me.

I liked the poem but the audio seemed too fast and unfeeling. I was expecting a slower sultry delivery to match the text and was therefore a bit jarred and put off by the audio.

Give the text next time

I like well done spoken word poetry but you lost me with the heavy breathing and I couldn't even finish. It may be a decent poem and I wish you would have put the text so I could have read it first. If the poem was good enough I may have been able to fully listen to the audio. I dislike Leonard Cohen's singing voice but his lyrics and poetry are so good that I listen to him anyway to get the additional emotional layer.

Fun

I liked it, the "release the hounds" made me chuckle as I sometimes refer to breasts as puppies. My issue is a small simple one, of where it should be off. Other than that I thought it was good. I wish I could say what kept it from being more than just good but I'm afraid I got nuttin'.

3 stars (***)

I have discovered your submission only this week. Your story 'The Naughty Wife' deservrrly got 5 stars (A+).

amazing

Oh my fuck..This is amazing...AAhh fuck baby...!!

Poetical thought

I thought the work, overall, was thought provoking, and well worth reading. I liked the way she ended with the question "Or is it?" suggesting our mother's perception is no longer valid in our world. I liked that notion, and I liked thinking that we may be part of the next wave, another chapter in romantical history. Some may complain that it is not 'erotic', yet even when making love there is space for more than just coitus. To my mind, it is writing like this which makes Literotica a more mature online library. Thanks for the work!

Makes you feel happy. Very happy.

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