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MIGHT READ MORE BUT YOU KEEP GETTING STUPID

YOU ARE AN ERRATIC WRITER. YOU NEED TO LEARN TO BE A EROTIC WRITER, DRAW READERS IN NO PISS THEM OFF.

Total fucking rubbish by A Wanker

Never read such rubbish dont write any more

Excellent Story!

Sexy plot! Well written. Made me hard. Made me come. Thanks!

Sounds like my kind of bar....

TommyMLe

I'm going to have to reread this tomorrow Lol. I just got off work and reading right now is a blur for me Lol

Nice birthday gift

That is a nice birthday gift, fast moving and hot.
Keep writing

too short for a good score

write short stories and you get bad scores from me, no matter how good they are.
just like fucking to point of climax and pull out. frustrating and pisses readers off.

This isn't writing, it's typing.

"She continued to hump and hump on my thick cock until her orgasm resided."

One of your better ones. "...her orgasm receded? subsided..."? To reside is to live in a place, for example, "She resided at 247 Milf Street." (Of course, her orgasms might subside there too.)

Not attention grabbing for me

Unfortunately, this story was unable to hold my interest for more than a few minutes at a time. I think it was due to the time and pov switching every couple paragraphs. Pretty okay story, I just don't think it's for me. Regardless, good luck in the contest!

Yuck

The incest grossed me out. I was hoping Gerry, sometimes called Jerry, would drown her. I hope this 'lady' and any like her never get married.

hmmmm

Good story.

Hard to tell, but It didnt seem she was ready to marry. Husband certainly should have delayed things.

Fiancee setting up house with you, a few months till wedding, just shouldnt be able to be seduced that easy.

She should have quit or stayed away from him after the first time.

Husband best keep a very close eye on her, especially as that predator is still close by.

Good story!

I look for an interesting plot that is a smooth read. This story was right-on.

Everybody had a double standard except the youngest of the bunch -

She at least knew what she was doing would not be acceptable to her guy (those she had met so far). So she stayed away from a committed relationship herself.

For the rest of the cheaters and enablers - sheesh -

But it was an interesting ending - and could happen I guess -

It was well conceived and written either way -

Hmm consent makes it all - hmmm

Work? But they need to decide if that is what they want and if they feel it should continue -

The idea that they would be marriage material at that age is clearly wonr headed - Even Ray and his wife may have issue LOL

Fun read thiough

great story

I loved your story. I really hope you write more. You have a great talent. I hope mother and daughter get together.

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