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As you turned off the voting I've only commented on this one.
Liked the plot, complex, interesting, and detailed.
The characters are quite good, the plot was far fetched but as a whole it’s a really good read.

While I appreciated the crossover with BGHP, it was too overstated for me. There were some other plot threads I would have preferred. I'm dying here for the next "Blue Eyes" chapter, so I'm ecstatic to hear you are along the road to recovery and look forward to seeing it posted. Couple minor edit opportunities, but great read and well written. I'm glad I have you favorited as I never go into this genre on a regular basis, so I would have missed it. 4.6*

Bravo.
Thank you!

@kvalentine, I'm sorry that those aspects of my story have bothered you. When I go through and do my edits on these chapters, I will try and fix the issue of referring to his rifle as a sniper... Wasn't aware I was doing that. You are correct, he's the sniper, not the rifle, though I might be just dropping the "rifle" part since context should imply that.

I am aware that some people think the morals I have had my character adopt are not combat veteran accurate. If they bother you, I'm sorry that the do, but I don't regret writing him that way. I think, though clearly I haven't portrayed it very accurately, that our MC feels like his knowledge and firearms do give him an unfair advantage. I'll try to explain it better in future chapters, but I think he is very apprehensive about the way his actions will affect the world. Kind of feels like Cortés, the conquistador, and like he will be looked on as a genocidal maniac. I mean the Conquistadors had black powder rifles and kind of looked at as monsters for using them in their conquering of the natives. Imagine how bad it would look with machine guns and sniper rifles. So, I think he's holding himself to a higher standard. Also, probably holding himself to a higher standard because... HE MET A FREAKING GOD, and all of God's wives and divine children. Kinda might have some worries there. The Angel told him his God won't judge him for his actions here, but then told him the local gods very well might. He kinda likes it here and wants to stick around, so he's trying not to fuck up his second chance. And when he's absolutely dominating, it feels bad shooting enemies in the back when the best they had was a spear, and you have a freaking sniper rifle.

Loved it! Except for using the word gash. Can't abide that word the was it was used. That being said Mandy should have taken that ass for a lot more in the settlement. I think that part should have been a little better for her.

I'll look for another chapter

Reading this was basically bumming me out after a while, to where I just bailed out 3/4 in.
The MC is the greatest douche, fucking and dropping women around him like there's no tomorrow.
Of course he's not at fault in any of this. Let's just be depressed and go along with anything.
I bailed when MC was fucking Beth and she almost mentioned that snowboarders name instead.
Now all grown up Beth, who brilliantly manages the clinic and is supposedly deeply in love with the MC, and is then ready to drop him in a heartbeat.
Not sure why this has the romance tag, when literally 95% is failed romance. Which is romance too, I guess...? Hmmm...

Totally mesmerizing - I need more Rob Johnson!

This was truly an awesome story. Kept me wanting to read more and more. There has never been a story like this I have read on here. I just wished we could of read more about the story before it just jumped and everyone was married or about to get married. My heart was hurting as I read and then bam it's over. The love between brother and sister who shared what they did, should of had more story behind it. I have so many thoughts about this story I'm lost to explain it. I just never wanted it to end and not end with so much left open around the story.
Wow, this has me in a whirlwind!!!

I actually have to disagree with all of the other comments that have been given up till now. The entire story was based on a premise of a goddess who had a goal, and the protagonist had to find the right people to do it.
If you just randomly said, a girl rather than giving her backgrounds, and why she was the right person/S, it would have been a very shallow story. As it is, it showed not only the physical, but metaphysical as well as spiritual side of each individual That he interacted with.
Thank you for sharing this with us as I very much enjoyed it and I appreciate the time that you put into the story. You had mentioned it in another story that we should read it and I’m very glad that I listened to you.
Sincerely,
Daniel

Something that's been annoying me is your repeated references to his rifle as a "sniper." A "sniper" is a person. It is objectively incorrect to call a rifle a "sniper" even if that might be common video game jargon. Doing so spoils the willful suspension of disbelief. You can call it a sniper rifle, an anti-material rifle, or even his BFG, but the MC is the sniper, not the weapon.

I also find his policy of not shooting fleeing soldiers as being very unbelievable. At no time in history (including today) have retreating soldier been considered to not be a valid target. Broadly speaking, the vast majority of combat casualties are caused after one side starts running. People who are running haven't surrendered. They are still combatants, and usually armed combatants. Similarly wounded soldiers are valid targets. They are still dangerous. If a soldier surrenders, that's different, but only if they don't try to escape. Soldiers and cops have very different jobs and consequently follow very different rules.

Most excellent and fun yarn. I'm looking forward to continuing this journey with you.

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Top Shelf!
Sadly, for whatever reason left incompleat...whatever the reason - whatever it is, I hope you are well.
11/10!!!!!

Hope author brings a conclusion to this story.

a gripping tale. I came to love your characters so quickly, and had this fear that they wouldn't make it, that the epilogue would be more of an epitaph. But the ending was good! thanks!

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