Poets have often compared an orgasm to death, I believe the French call it the little death. I really enjoyed play on this story, with the giver being the assassin. Very clever very erotic and very enjoyable.
If I may humbly make an observation (take it or leave it at your discretion), you have a nice slow and steady buildup, and then the sex at the end seems super rushed (the way its written, not the actions). I know we all love to get to the orgasms, but the build up is important too :)
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Is it my turn, yet?
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Poets have often compared an orgasm to death, I believe the French call it the little death. I really enjoyed play on this story, with the giver being the assassin. Very clever very erotic and very enjoyable.
Want More!!!!
I'm sure the title conveys my message.
Yea
You should write how hey are doing now. I think us readers want to know , if Ashley and Jeanie got married .
Wow
Great story! Really enjoyed the chemistry between these two and I know I'd love to see what happens, if you feel moved to share more. Thank you!
excellent!
Excellent part one, with plenty of room to build.
If I may humbly make an observation (take it or leave it at your discretion), you have a nice slow and steady buildup, and then the sex at the end seems super rushed (the way its written, not the actions). I know we all love to get to the orgasms, but the build up is important too :)
Very sexy, keep it going!
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love it!
Great story with loads of potential - more please!
more this story must not end
1 meet her children 2 childhood friend 3 old rivel
please
You can't leave us hanging write more!
Great
I was really enjoying this one...I hope you can add more to the story. I'd like to find out what happens to them! :)
more please
Very sweet
Very erotic. Nice. Thanks for sharing your words.