particularly nice image "A smile of lust is upon my lips" How long can I handle this desire. might take a "?" rather than a period
where,sweet romance= no need for comma after where human kind=humankind use of semicolons is ok, but a comma might work as well, also you don't need periods to end a verse, as it is a poem. Just a suggestion; carry on as you wish.
"saith" is 3rd person present indicative (says), therefore drop "has"
I'll keep watching.
Hopes , dreams , litter & mess all lie on the square ......till next year ! Very evocative , Demure .
Thanks Maria for the encouragement. I am glad that you liked it :D Av
I hate my spell chack
My spell check automatically changed them sorry
quite brilliant! also use of cud, an uncommon word in America except as used with animals chewing, works well
It is a contration used to shorten power
power? a rather dark poem with attempt at philosophy
this is your best one, very Elizabethan
but nice try, also assorted errors or typos detract, i.e. "Its from may change" "From pain shall ever touch they heart" if I might suggest, post one or two poems well edited and proofed, 5 is a bit much especially with so many errors or oversights, no offense!
Thanks for sharing, brought a tear to th eye
not exactly my tea of cups
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nice
particularly nice image "A smile of lust is upon my lips"
How long can I handle this desire. might take a "?" rather than a period
I love fairies, all kinds! a few minor comments, hopefully constructive
where,sweet romance= no need for comma after where
human kind=humankind
use of semicolons is ok, but a comma might work as well, also you don't need periods to end a verse, as it is a poem. Just a suggestion; carry on as you wish.
grammar error
"saith" is 3rd person present indicative (says), therefore drop "has"
ummmm
I'll keep watching.
Nostalgiaground?
Hopes , dreams , litter & mess all lie on the square ......till next year ! Very evocative , Demure .
Thanks
Thanks Maria for the encouragement. I am glad that you liked it :D
Av
sorry
I hate my spell chack
sorry
My spell check automatically changed them sorry
last four lines are
quite brilliant!
also use of cud, an uncommon word in America except as used with animals chewing, works well
po'er
It is a contration used to shorten power
what is po'er?
power? a rather dark poem with attempt at philosophy
nicely done
this is your best one, very Elizabethan
a bit too shakespearean
but nice try,
also assorted errors or typos detract, i.e. "Its from may change"
"From pain shall ever touch they heart"
if I might suggest, post one or two poems well edited and proofed, 5 is a bit much especially with so many errors or oversights, no offense!
I felt that
Thanks for sharing, brought a tear to th eye
wow, you sure have a word with ways
not exactly my tea of cups