This is so hot. The entire series, I'm so wet and hot. 9 inch cock, big tits and Lilly was a virgin. I could imagine Jack and Anthony taking Lilly together one in her ass one pounding her pussy. Please write more, I came hard multiple times reading this story!
This is a good story that needs to be continued. Thanks
A gynecologist's daughter who is not on the pill?
hook line and sinker... next chapter please
This is a great story. Would like to see a chapter three and beyond .
A classic jackass story
Viv' is showing her 'cougar' interest in him, so maybe he decides to pursue something along that avenue, and, in the process, Brenda becomes jealous. He acts on the teasing that Viv' is giving him, and she willingly becomes his first sexual partner and teacher. Then in chapter four, Brenda learns of the affair, and actively pursues her son -- eventually submitting totally to him (maybe by chapter 5). By chapter six he tries to satisfy both women, and begins to amass his (lion) pride.
To carolinerdreamer, if you read the intro to chapter one then you would know that "How It Began" is a prequel about two previously written stories where the dad is very alive and intricate to those stories. Therefore, it would make no sense to kill him off in the current story line.
We need more chapters to a good story. Thanks
Great fucking story, mate. Reading it was like hearing a retarded person speak, half-formed phrases and dialogues, incoherent and meaningless ramblings. I haven't seen such atrocious grammar in a while. Your male lead was a whiny-ass, whimpy little bitch, female lead a manipulative, controlling slut. All in all, a great recipe for writing a shit-pile of a story such as this.
P.S. The first sentence was sarcasm in case you missed it.
A wonderful and fantastic story, I only hope that it or part of the story was true.
... and it could use some punctuation, too. Only worth 3 stars.
You just had to make him eat his own cum, you disgusting fuck. Way to ruin a story asswipe!
You should continue this series
I read and commented on "pop out" and ch01 of this story. I think you get better with each story. You have cleared up all the shortcomings I found in "pop out." I do agree with two comments that are opposed to each other. You really will lose some readers if you drag the sex out too long. Also, you are doing such a great job at teasing you're making us look forward to the rest. If you finish it in the next ch. I think you'll get a lot of *****'s.
As to where to go next. You have to pick up the pace. So far you've been in foreplay. You have her, (the story) at fever pitch. She's moaning, humping your hand and begging you to stop teasing. The story is at the point where you either fuck her or she tells you to fuck yourself, while she gets dressed.
One way that seems natural since you handle skipping days like you did is to skip months. Let boy bring us up to date on he and Mom continuing warm and cold for the last year. Do this in a one paragraph summary. He could tell about how Dad either passed away or better yet how Dad ran off with co-worker and after a short period of mad Mom starts to recover her cool. Now pick up the story in real time where Mom gets horny and son makes his play while Mom reluctantly gives in step by step until they wind up getting it on.
Don't forget, you asked for ideas. This one is worth exactly what it cost you. Luck! thecarolinadreamer
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