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And after ? What happens after the baby is born? This is just the beginning of a story! It is not enough to have a vague idea

First, you desperately need an editor. Second, it is very hard to follow who is talking because you don't give any indication that the view point has switched. Third, when naming your characters, don't make them similar as with Gail and Gil. 3 stars.

Stupid him to give security to Amy and his paramour. Deserves to be sacked now. I hope he has the pictures still with him : to teach lessons to Amy and his paramour just in case!!!!

An intelligent solution! (much to the disgust of the fanatics, who live in a world of their own on the dark side of the moon).

I loved how Amanda succumbed to Darius cock and became his woman.

An erotic treat 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

Hot dogs with ketchup?? Don't do that in New York, you'll get deported to Jersey!! The pushcarts don't even have ketchup, and don't ask.

Forget the 750 thing, not that that's not good to start with.

But that was a great story, so unexpected ending, fantastic.

So hot!!! I love this!

Great story my Lady! Too bad the gaps between each episode is soooo long. But on the other hand it helps us fantasize about Tony's adventures and maybe seedy developments (?)

More please, this was exposition, what happens next? that’s the good stuff. 5 stars though 🤩.

Good story! A modern version of Pygmalion. I am very much enjoying the growth in the characters and their relationship. Thank you for writing and sharing your story with us.

Oh so detailed, I like the plot but I feel like your more interested in the music business than the story

Ha, ha, ha. A bit over the top, but funny.

Anonymous, are you the one that keep mentioning utilizing the town. Ok, let's say this isn't a story and the author just wants everyone in a compound, cause it's his story you know. I can think of a dozen or so reason why the town won't work. 1. The Feds might find it tough to...

Sometimes I forget it is Wednesday arvo and Sixth School day - then I scroll through the stories and get a pleasant surprise (like today) - another great yarn - thanks

I love this story.

I love reading a hot author that I hadn't read before! More sexy stories to read! Yay!! Five stars and a favorite point!

I want more!

Sweet story. Good character development with strong backstories. Excellent sense of place. Unsurprising but believable plot. Needs some proofreading for minor errors, mostly wrong word typos or spellcheck auto correct errors. Overall a good job. Thanks for your time and effort. Your...

A familiar theme but very hot! Five stars and a favorite point!

This is such a great storey, finding the chapters a bit short, can’t wait to find out what happens next. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

What if Dylan realised he needed to slurp his own cum to remind him of the taste when he eats out his girlfriend's pussy, comes back out, grabs his boxers and inadvertently eats Ry-ry's, wondering why it tastes different?

Are there monsters with an affinity for healing? If so, that seems an obvious path.

you are the best

May February rest in peace!

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A really good read yet again. Thank you. I'd love to hear more of Officer Beere's story. How she came to be in her job and what her personal life might be like. Perhaps Lisa will encounter her again when they are both in uniform?

Another exciting chapter!

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Excellent tale and I couldn't agree more about what you say in the "Author's notes"

The simple fact is that most rapists do not perform to an audience therefore it is almost inevitably almost always he said / she said. A huge problem legally but I am amongst those who believe that...

It made me think of the cinema when a film overflows with special effects to compensate for the weakness of the script.

In your case, there was too much exaggeration, too much extravagance in an attempt to create more drama.

In the end, this makes the situations and characters seem...

Enjoyed the story a lot. Waiting for chapter 2! AAAAAA++++++

Good one, I didn’t pick up on Toidi was a backwards spelling. That reminds me of Roctoddam and his lackey Egoots from the Sinbad cartoon in the seventies.

I'm not sure why he spent so much time at the hospital after she so thoroughly burned the marriage.

Also, I thought he was a journalist. Fox News is an oxymoron. They have been a contributing factor in what may be the end of the American experiment. I guess we will have to see...

I have to admit this chapter seems sex-heavy. I'm by no means going to ding the account for it, but I will say there might be a few readers here and there that may. It's obvious Thorn has to proceed slowly, and Jay most certainly is playing all of this very close to the vest. I don't...