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great story.
Well-written, concise and has a believable plot.
Have no fear...
I am sorry that you did not enjoy my story, hence my note at the very top of the page. I will either delete this one or send in a new one. Please feel free to criticize me with what you feel; I was only trying to add more, I'm not sure really what, but my fingers typed this out for me. I don't believe in cheating, I even put that in there and she knew she made a mistake but, have no fear, I will rewrite this chapter. Thank you.
Onward I go! (:
Love
the way this story is going!
Can't wait to read about the day before the wedding. Good work!
Hmm...
I'm surprised you decided to make Cassie a cheater considering how strongly reacted when she thought Sean was the one cheating. This doesn't really fit with the romance theme you had established for the story and makes Cassie seem like the antithesis of what you previously made her out to be. She made such a big deal about Sean and the waitress when nothing happened but she then in turn betrays him completely with his own father? If in future chapters you write Cassie confessing to Sean, it would be implausible for Sean to forgive her for that same reason and would detract from the story if he did.
Anyway, sorry for the long comment, feel free to ignore. I really have enjoyed your story.
-Wax_Wings
Don't like the way the story has gone!!!
This was starting as a romance, but now it's awful! Such a shame.
You led me astray.
I was starting to arc up at the impending non-consent/rape and then Teresa came of age. Wasn't she lucky her first suited her so well.
Good job Ashson.
Where oh where?
Was she when I was young and horny?
Darn enticing.
One more thing.
While don't want to have people go back to thinking I'm an asshole again, I would like to disagree with another post saying they should talk this out. Since he didn't really do anything with Cindy, talking about it would just hurt his girlfriend, and would make her worry and be suspicious for the rest of their college life, at least. Sometimes the shrinks are wrong. Too much honesty about feelings (no, not guilty actions), can wreck a good relationship.
Absolutely whew! Worried there.
That brought some well taken tension to the story. I'm ashamed to say it now, thirty years later, but when a similar situation came up with my first real girlfriend in college, I gave in to temptation (we weren't head-over-heels in love, it wasn't her roomate, and we didn't go all the way, but I was still an asshole, I know). I'm just lucky she either never found out or forgave me.
My only pathetic defense is that I was like the protagonist in the story. No dates, and a complete nerd in high school and the idea that two girls might actually be interested in me kind of made my brain and libido short circuit.
I sincerely apologize to both my sweet someones at DSU and to all wronged women everywhere. Some of us really do learn better, eventually.
Great rape story
Doesn't matter that she "secretly wanted it"; she said no. Most rapists are convinced that every woman wants their dicks anyway. So: great rape story, bro.
What a line!
Your description of the male emotional range was so perfect, I laughed out loud. The story was very good, but two things are nagging at my very overactive imagination.
First: How is a 18-year-old girl in 1972 not getting pregnant after all this non-prophylactic copulation over a period of months? Who outside of liberal college professors and middle-aged hookers were giving their teen girls the pill back then?
Second, I could see her father coming to terms with what he assumes his daughter is doing with another high school kid, but being happy about it strains credibility.
Otherwise, I like your narrator and Kim a lot.
Yes, Please!
Lesson one, always swap cum with your lady. I'm dying to get to lesson two!
While your story needs editing do, please, continue.
Nice
This is a nice start to your story. I wouldn't listen to much to the Anonymous comments since they don't even have the courage to make an account. You do need to do more proof reading in your future stories. All in all a really good start.
Replying to you lot
There has been a lot of talk saying how this resembles the Big Bang Theory. Naturally, that was the idea I was going for. As for the very short and not massively fruitful chapters, my device disallows me to extend pages further than the length that they are now.
So, my deepest apologies for that, and well done to the some of you that noticed the inspiration.
-Storydwarf
once
and out. GOOD