2004-02-04 -- haiku

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            crowded campfire
            face burns --
            i withdraw and shiver



wh,
2004-02-04

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AmyfriendAmyfriendabout 17 years ago
Short, sweet...

and to the point. Nice job.

KOLKOREKOLKOREabout 17 years ago
a cautios student seeks warmth

It’s been three years since this poem came to inspire warm warn or burn those who read it. Such is the extent of a powerful poem. I was reading some of the strong debates over it, then some of the simple words of appreciation then I had my chance to be exposed to the fire. Its simplicity is overwhelming If you are just used to the thick layers of ancient or rarely used words more obstacles for access, then the immediacy of access here can be too much, initially. I have learned something already; I will approach the fire slowly. Slowly I will learn and slowly I will get used to the increased hit. To the crowd. I am not retreating though.

duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
succinct

With just eight words - the poem is over. Clever - impossible not to get the picture.

LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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Excellent

Syllable count's like drawing inside the lines in a coloring book - fine for a 3 year old

But for a 33 year old, it's the concept that counts.

Senna JawaSenna Jawaabout 20 years agoAuthor
Jim,

you make impudent, snotty noise (in no relation to my haiku, which you cannot touch--you just talk regardless).

I know you from your writings on Literotica.

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