tagNon-Erotic Poetry43 Hours straight

43 Hours straight

bytodski28©

abandoned
half bottle of
coke,
scraps of wrappers
scattered about,
sleep drought
pickling the brain in
brine,
thinking salty thoughts
in wounded skin

the screws they used
to fasten me together
hell for leather tight
popped right out
the other side,
scattering a smattering
of small debris
in what was left of my
mind

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by Tsotha04/14/14

I wonder if salty thoughts has the same meaning in English as it has in my language; it would seem so. I can see how one would have salty thoughts, in this situation. I agree about the last stanza, andmore...

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by todski2811/18/13

To lesse

Sleep!!

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by Oldbear6311/18/13

Feel it with you Todski

Really liked the last stanza - brought it home.

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by LesseloovesPeter11/17/13

but what will you do with the next 5?

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by twelveoone11/17/13

good

scraps of wrappers
scattered about,
do more
5ed

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