- Non-Erotic Poetry
- 5 Miles High And 60 Below
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Ice lines sharp bisecting sky
To skirt the rose of Mars
Ebullient moon sepulchral glow
How hide the twinkled star
Deep lacerate the cosmos
Distort external drift
Noctilucent lanes, slow waft and wane
See how the frozen shift
- COMMENTS
duddle146over 17 years agoEbullient moon - twinkled star - nighttime in the heavens.
There is a quiet mystical strength to this work.
LeBrozover 17 years agoHas the feel of a
Lewis Carroll rhyme
Describing the scene while flying
Five miles high...
KRover 18 years agoI've read and re-read this poem. It is evocative and nebulous. It won't settle in my mind, it floats, telling me I have not 'gotten' it yet. Must read again. And again. Until that moment of clarity when the imagery settles like a snowflake upon an eyelash.
PS: I do think 'bisecting' is the verb, Eve
WickedEveover 18 years agoI do like the poem, but I did have a bit of trouble with the first line. "lines" is being used as a verb, right? I think if it read this way, "Ice lines the sharp bisecting sky" it would work better, at least for me.
