Brown recluse

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duckiesmut
duckiesmut
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My silent predator eyes
his prize, lingers
in my closet as legs like whispers
feather their way past
an army of defenses- heels spiked
in quiet warning- and he lurks
behind last year’s cashmere.

He outwaits me, outwits
me, and more holes are cored
into my legs,
the sting and scent
of peroxide a memorial
of shared regret.

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AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
I remember the smell of peroxide well.

I was in basic training in South Carolina when I was bitten by one. To this day, the smell of peroxide draws up the memory of that nasty bite.

LeBrozLeBrozabout 17 years ago
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 35,000 poems.

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LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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The only element from the South

I don't miss here in the damn frigid North;

I'd rather take my chances with that little critter.

cherries_on_snowcherries_on_snowalmost 18 years ago
Like the double imagery

evoked by the predator in the closet line. However, that also made the holes in the legs image more disturbing. I definitely winced at this poem and thought of spraying all my shoes down. Then I remembered, no brown recluses up here. =D

TheRainManTheRainManalmost 18 years ago
nicely done.

very pleasant reading. concise and in focus (though I think some of the word choices ... 'like whispers feather' for instance, are not particularly fitting and feel like "the easy way out." you can be fresher than that, i know for a fact). i particularly like the ending.

good to see you posting poetry again. :)

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