Bruised

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_Lynn_
_Lynn_
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A myriad of colors
Hidden from the world
Skin once soft and smooth
Broken and marred
The sting and pain
Her body on fire
Desire
Burning in her eyes
Their secret
The marks she craves

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Author's note: I'm not a poet. I string words together and hope they make sense to others. Let me know what you think.

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JWrenJWrenover 9 years ago
Flesh

Disagree with 1201 (how dare I ?). Not everything has to pared back to the bare bones: some of us like a bit of flesh and padding. This was a fine example of that little bit extra which makes the verse more complete and rounded.

tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
THE STING OF THE WHIP

brings pleasure to both. TK U MLJ LV NV

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
good advice by 12-1

Start and end with the strongest lines

Another great poem!!

twelveoonetwelveooneover 13 years ago
if

you are not a poet, why attempt it? It does make sense, and it is a good tactic to open and close with your best. I'll show you a quick trick:

A myriad of colors

Their secret

The marks she craves

this says what you want, the rest is not needed

vrosej10vrosej10over 13 years ago
Pretty cool stuff.

You've stuck to the concrete pretty damn well for a poetry newbie. Watch the cliches and you be writing them with the best soon. :) You're gunna get a mention in recommendations.

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