Candle in Review

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The enchantment of natural light ensnares me on a night soaked in emotion and half-frozen snowflakes.

I see time in the wax: at once sedentary and smooth, now crawling away, coalescing in its clear and present pool. It whispers away, even. How else does the candle shrink into nothingness? In inexorable transmutation the wax is lost, lapped up by the air. Past wax floats away, a phantom of smoke and smells to be caught by lungs, catalogued by brains and maybe preserved therein. Remembered...

There's life, there's existence. Look as it skirts time, flickering in its present pool. There's catalytic contact: a kiss, and time swoons at the flame, melts into its place. Its our greater mover, life, and it burns us, breaks us apart. Collateral collects, detritus in that polluted pool, the present. Bits of us are lost in that collection of time.

We burn out. Whether by force or attrition. Wicks wane by the gobbling flame, and flames flicker and fail. If there's something left when fire swoops up into the air and smokes itself out of existence, if some untouched weight of wax sits still when the light goes out, it remains, forever irrelevant. There it waits, future-time-wax, untapped, untouched. Has it any tie to a wick whittled down, or one dead and doomed to burn no more? Never will it drip and dip into that pool of present life, that once kindled wax, wet with energy, now slipping quickly from memory, solidifying to join untouched time: the solid, the saved, the unexplored possibility of more expansive pools, new formations, realized potential...

Candle, dispel my disquietude. Cradle me in the warmth of your shadow. Smoke, encircle me in your dispersion, memorialize your mother candle as I sleep and she dreams in dying peace.

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SweetOblivionSweetOblivionabout 11 years ago
Excellent prose poetry

lots of exquisite metaphor. The careful juxtaposition of a continuum of thoughts, feelings and words may be a little rich for some, but it certainly aided my digestion. Well done. A certain Scotsman' might be well advised to go and read a book about poetry form before making further ill-informed comment. S.O..

erotic_synchronicityerotic_synchronicityabout 11 years agoAuthor
Fear not hybridity

I fail to see the problem with fusing prose and poetry as I have attempted to do here, Scotsman69.

I consider this to be long form poetry as I had very set scansion in mind while writing/reading this to myself.

Inclined to shirk conformity to any rigid construction of form, I wrote this free form. I consider "Candle in Review" to be a cross-breed prose-poem, and I tagged this post responsibly as such. It's not as if this has never been done. If you'd like to critique my writing for something other than its departure from tradition stanza structuring, I welcome you to do so. Otherwise, kindly comment elsewhere, Scotsman69. I see no reason to step on the toes of experimenters.

Scotsman69Scotsman69about 11 years ago
And this

is supposed to be

a poem?

Jesus, I thought poetry and prose were different.

How silly of me.

freakyfreaky469freakyfreaky469about 11 years ago

Interesting metaphor. But doesn't wax eventually return, as we all do, to dust? We are one.

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