Caw in Gray Skies

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Rybka
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Caw in Gray Skies


The crows fly low
Cawing gray skies
forcing leafs from the trees

Death is behind
a cold front coming
run, flee, fly, death is nigh!



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tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
THE CROW AS AN ARBINGER

of doom and seasons, TK U MLJ LV NV

LeBrozLeBrozover 16 years ago
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My personal taste is that I don't have a problem with your particular signature style. It adds an unusual visual element to your words and complements what is said.

wildsweetonewildsweetoneover 16 years ago
my thoughts...

not sure my initial comment worked, so trying again.

in my opinion, the font changes work in more ways than being simply the poet's 'signature'.

when reading this poem, i noticed each line can be read as a separate thought. together the first stanza works well. the second stanza works well. twin up the lines with the identical fonts and you have not simply, clear images, but also the reason behind the images. they work so well that i enjoy it.

i also like the sounds, especially the 'c/k' sounds in the first two lines. the repetition of 'death' in the last stanza is growing on me.

keep enjoying the writing Rybka, i know i'm enjoying the reading.

wso

RybkaRybkaover 16 years agoAuthor
Thank you

Thank you Sir! ~

I realize that you do not comment on poetry very frequently anymore, so your comment is especially valuable to me.

At the moment I have adopted the font changes as a signature trait for all my three line poems (and three line strophes) that are not meant to be haiku. ~ Perhaps I am wrong, but I feel a need to visually differentiate the lines. ~

Other opinions are welcome.

jthserrajthserraover 16 years ago
I don't know...

It's something we talked about long ago. I think the words should provide the necessary emphasis in themselves. I think they do that here and the font change actually detracts from it all. Trying to read line 1, I was drawn down to line three, if that was your intent, I don't know what it accomplished. As for the words themselves, without considering the fonts, I think it worked in a haunting way.

jim : )

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