Chrysalis

bydemure101©

If only I could change my shape, and stay
all winter wrapped in some hard skin until
at last spring drove me out, and, dazed at first,
and hungry, with a painful winter's thirst,
I'd go out in the world to have my fill
and try those bright new wings, and fly away.

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by LesseloovesPeter11/19/13

But those moments through winter you miss are part of life as well...even if they are hard to face...

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by twelveoone11/19/13

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by Ash, is specific. 5ed, but how old this? Is the fact that this is a Chrysalis, instead of hibernation new enough?
L2 nice. But it looks like a sleepwalk, outside of the rhyme scheme. That said, I ammore...

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by Oldbear6311/19/13

Really nice Demure

Beautiful use of words and structure to catch the sentiment. But I need to write you one of winter...

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by Ashesh911/19/13

Stay rhymes with " away " , " until" with "fill" , "first" with "thirst ":

if a mirror is kept between 3rd. 'n 4th. line it's like a symmetry !!

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by Ashesh911/19/13

Butterfly , o

demure butterfly
sweet is thy
Poetry
thus spake i !!
5-ed

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