Counting

byOpenField©

Her body vines about my body
Like a plant seeking out the sun

From a crowded plot
On a sunless street,
Climbing, always climbing.

She twists
And I nearly lose myself.
Love is a struggle

To last through her desire.
I want to last,
But what number comes before 99?

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by todski2808/16/13

Just what I see

Using counting as a ways and means of staving off climax, so as you can writhe with hers

plant seeking out the sun,
climbing, always climbing the build up to orgasm?

another well written erotic piece,more...

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by normal jean08/16/13

I don't

care much for your use of "body" twice in the first line. You could have said, perhaps, "her body vines about mine".

I guess I missed something because I could not make much sense of this even attemptingmore...

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by twelveoone08/15/13

69?

5?

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by Tristesse208/15/13

Nice but....

...I question the use of "vines" as a verb. "she twines about...." or "she is a vine about..." but that is my only quibble in an otherwise lovely piece.

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by HarryHill08/15/13

I agree

good closer

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