- Erotic Poetry
- Dance Partners
Note: You can change font size, font face, and turn on dark mode by clicking the "A" icon tab in the Story Info Box.
You can temporarily switch back to a Classic Literotica® experience during our ongoing public Beta testing. Please consider leaving feedback on issues you experience or suggest improvements.
Click here
Many times we’ve been together performing the art of the dance
In class as partners your beauty is kept to your boyfriend Lance
Outside in the sun performing the Cha Cha it is no prance
Your sundress shows your heaving breasts, keeping me in a trance
Sydney the heat rises when my hand grazes your thigh
Our dance reveals the sexual tension none need to question why
My hand grips your ass lifting you panic striking your eye
Sensing my moment I lick your salty breast your resistance is nigh
Your fingers wrap in my hair your eyes affix me with a steely glance
Our dance ends for we must part but you hold a needy stance
You whisper “meet me later” knowing that you and I have one chance
I will only meet you though if you dump that loser of yours Lance
We meet up later and after our passionate embrace you sigh
I pull you close press you against the wall to raise you high
I slip off your panties into my pocket a wonderful present for I
I grope your bountiful breasts and squeeze your ass as if I’ll die
I take my cock and plunge into your depths until I can no longer advance
You velvet walls wrap and your legs hold me slowly I lose my pants
Thrusting deep and kissing your sweaty skin not what I’d call romance
We both come together and kiss hungrily once more savoring our last dance.
- COMMENTS
twelveoonealmost 13 years ago(the death card) From your bio: Please feel free to comment and give feedback on anything I write - I only want to get better.
A series of questions:
Why no punctuation?
Why the Rhyme Scheme? aaaabbbbaaaabbbbaaaa, or something like that, it calls attention to itself.
What poetry have you read?
Why did you leave the caps in the front? (ans. MS word, wasn't it?)
Here is what I read:
My hand grips your ass lifting you panic striking your eye
I imagine an ass striking an eye, which certainly would cause a panic, oh wait, I get it it's "your eye sensing..."
Two specific suggestions,
shorten the step
don't invert syntax for the sake of rhyme
One big general suggestion:
If you want to write it, read it,
might I suggest a thread, "A gift for the authors"
On the plus side a serious attempt was made at a structure, but really I can't vote on this.
