- Erotic Poetry
- dirty concrete
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Click hereyour torn t-shirt and tight blue jeans
made my heart race and my knees hurt.
the big grease spot in your garage
was a mirror of my unclean thoughts.
you vanished on a lonely hiway
winding through the delta night.
that's when I reached my breaking point -
my knees gave way and my heart ached.
- COMMENTS
greenmountaineeralmost 11 years agoI'm not a big fan of most of the so-called erotic poems, but this was really well written. I agree with the comment about lines 3 and 4. I also thought the deliberate misspelling of "hiway" was an original poetic device. It made me take notice without confusing me, and I recognized it as intentional. The metrics of the lines with the variation worked well too. Nicely done!
