drunk at 18

bydmetria©

i sit.
i drink.
i wonder why thinking isn't
breathing for me

there's an aircraft
far above stealing the
sky as if a star

concentrate and all should
become clear.
   should but doesn't
   the more i concentrate
   the fuzzier everything becomes
slowly but surely

every catch phrase
interpreted one of many ways
only two ultimate overall interpretations
to be made, good? or bad?
  but not for me
  everything is everything

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by erectus12308/23/13

oh to be 18 and drunk

how well you express it, nicely done, especially the first three verses

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by HarryHill08/22/13

I agree, a good start

and a good finish, but I think it's been used before

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by Desejo08/22/13

Really like the first stanza of this. I usually dislike the I/i capitalization but it works here. I think you cold almost have stopped at the end of that stanza as an entire poem. As it moves on, itmore...

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