Entrapment

byMrFaithful©

Author's Note

One of my much earlier pieces written so it most likely wont appeal to everyone's tastes. Thus constructive critism would be most welcomed.

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I lost myself to someone
But that was long ago
And now my heart's in memory
And swaying to and fro

I thought that she was special
And saw her as one of a kind
But now I have this problem
I can't keep her from my mind

So much I try to forget
And lost myself in reading
But I feel like I have lost
And like giving myself a beating

It's not easy living life
When it feels you going through hell
For it feels like you are trapped
Or rather locked within a cell

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by MrFaithful01/15/13

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by Desejo01/09/13

One of the things I have learned from others here is to read things aloud. The first two stanzas of this have a sing song rhythm, but the third is off. Reworking the third stanza would help make thismore...

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by tazz31701/09/13

PRETTY STUPID TO ENTRAP YOURSELF

lets hope the guilty paid also. TK U MLJ LV NV

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