tagNon-Erotic PoetryFailure, The Great and Glorious

Failure, The Great and Glorious

byTrixareforkids©

I remember leaping
The air under me
Seeming to lift me
And the exaltation
Before
The crash landing
I remember spinning
Death grip on the
Bar, feeling of
Flying
And the thump
I remember running
Full tilt
Eyes on the door
As
The glass shattered
I remember hyperventilating
Toes touching only
Three of twelve
Stairs and the
Terror
I remember the plop
Of cards, not mine
And the sweep of
Chips, no longer
Mine
I remember the shiny
Gun
In my face and a stream
Of crazed profanity
All mine
I remember him
And a needle
And a burnt spoon
And a baby that
Never was
I remember because
I learn best
When
It all goes
Horribly wrong

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by Cleardaynow06/22/14

Really good

This is so strong and evocative. Much the best of your recent poems (what on earth was the Call about?). This is really good.

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by HoneyAdored06/21/14

Poetry in motion

Another 5 girl friend

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by Oldbear6306/17/14

Wow

Excellent progression, Trix, that draws you in and pulls you down. Vivid images. Really excellent writing.

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by twelveoone06/16/14

look

anytime a writer gets ahead of me - 5ed

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by todski2806/15/14

grim and dark

and like a chapter from my life trix, 5 for the slear cut and dry reality of it all


I do question the use of mine here twice though I think you could drop the not mine and join this as one?

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