Note: You can change font size, font face, and turn on dark mode by clicking the "A" icon tab in the Story Info Box.
You can temporarily switch back to a Classic Literotica® experience during our ongoing public Beta testing. Please consider leaving feedback on issues you experience or suggest improvements.
Click hereIt’s cold out there. A warmer glow, and clear
A smiling eye, across the decades bright
In harmony beyond the vanished years
Envelops us again, though scoff we might.
The scars of youth, and innocence we scorn
The troubles both that were and those that are
The freedom and the love so violent born
Since paler days does naught your song to mar
All harbor lights are not a fool’s match
Yet roses thrive today and thorns there were
If reveries withstand the golden latch
Who cares if myth and fact become a blur?
Sweet venom, goes the tale, in your embrace,
Then close my eyes and find the safest place!
interlock pattern here:
though scoff we might.
The scars of youth, and innocence we scorn
scoff, scars, scorn
a sonnet, does scream it, good, feel the material would have been better in another form, where rhyme is not a consideration
5ed
Really enjoyed this. It flows well and the thematic structure as well as the way you've expressed the sonnet form feels faithful to the Elizabethan tradition to me. A few lines seem a bit awkward and might be tinkered with, but I know it's always a challenge to get the meter and rhyme to play well together. Sometimes meaning or smoothness suffer as a result.
Just my opinion and thank you for the read.