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It’s cold out there. A warmer glow, and clear
A smiling eye, across the decades bright
In harmony beyond the vanished years
Envelops us again, though scoff we might.
The scars of youth, and innocence we scorn
The troubles both that were and those that are
The freedom and the love so violent born
Since paler days does naught your song to mar
All harbor lights are not a fool’s match
Yet roses thrive today and thorns there were
If reveries withstand the golden latch
Who cares if myth and fact become a blur?
Sweet venom, goes the tale, in your embrace,
Then close my eyes and find the safest place!

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twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 11 years ago
nice

interlock pattern here:

though scoff we might.

The scars of youth, and innocence we scorn

scoff, scars, scorn

a sonnet, does scream it, good, feel the material would have been better in another form, where rhyme is not a consideration

5ed

AngelineAngelinealmost 11 years ago
Lovely sonnet!

Really enjoyed this. It flows well and the thematic structure as well as the way you've expressed the sonnet form feels faithful to the Elizabethan tradition to me. A few lines seem a bit awkward and might be tinkered with, but I know it's always a challenge to get the meter and rhyme to play well together. Sometimes meaning or smoothness suffer as a result.

Just my opinion and thank you for the read.

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