- Erotic Poetry
- floraphile
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Click hereLoving plants
As she does
I am afraid to interrupt
Or would they mind
Resting tranquil
Her fingers soiled
From fresh wet holes
As I reached from behind
Disturbing her work
To play in the bush
Between her tulips
Plunging down rootbound
Prancing and pruning
Cutting and capering
In my onion furskin folds
Dallying on orchid lobes
I suck the honeysuckle
Watching fresh moments
And gardenias bloom
In heavy low earth scents
Give me a moment
Or one moment more
To take in the thrumming
While idle hands
Have no shortage
Of pressing needs
Here in her garden
- COMMENTS
Maria2394over 18 years agoand this one is really good. I tend to agree about the short lines for the most part, it can stutter a poem, in some cases, but this is really good!! Uses some new imagery, believe me, I have written a million garden poems( ask anyone here that remembesr before I deleted them all) and it gets hard to come up with something new after a while. Im impressed and will read your other "stuff" now. Keep up the good work!!!
maria
TheRainManover 18 years agoI think you hold the metaphor pretty well, though it is stretched too far and too long. I also think the formatting could be greatly improved. The continuous short lines are not purposeful, to me. I would consider a restructuring.
