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Forbidden Lover

bymamaval2930©

Forbidden lover, come to me in our
    secret place
Our love is hidden in shadows of
    our mind

Forbidden lover, steal a kiss as we try
     to seek a space
Our desire is taboo yet we cannot stop
     our grind

Forbidden lover, you know what we
    need, you and I
give me your desires and fulfill each
    of mine

Forbidden lover, I love how you make
    me sigh
stretch out with me as I try to blow
    your mind

Forbidden lover, you'll leave me,
    I know,
but for now you are mine to have
    and to hold

Forbidden lover, you are all hers
    to tow
don't forget me when you leave me
    in the cold

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by Anonymous09/29/13

Bohemian Beauty

I must admit I like a poem that has a solid, and stable rhythm and rhyme, so there were some stiff parts to this poem where this didn't happen. But I liked the start of each verse being the same. Itmore...

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by mamaval293007/23/13

thank you

Thanks for the critiques. ...they will help in future writing.

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by Anonymous07/23/13

not just a rhyme. .

"All hers to tow" is referring to the fact the forbidden lover is a married man and because of this must follow the whims of a wife...The speaker is recognizing the wife's rights over her husband.
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by UnderYourSpell07/23/13

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What does ' you are all hers to tow' mean, has it only been used because it rhymes?

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by twelveoone07/23/13

it would have been nice

to break from the "Forbidden lover", pleasant surprise, no rhyming coups
I try to blow your mind - overused
this is very good effort on organization, try to rid it of things that you heard before
5 butmore...

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