- Erotic Poetry
- Forbidden Lover
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Forbidden lover, come to me in our
secret place
Our love is hidden in shadows of
our mind
Forbidden lover, steal a kiss as we try
to seek a space
Our desire is taboo yet we cannot stop
our grind
Forbidden lover, you know what we
need, you and I
give me your desires and fulfill each
of mine
Forbidden lover, I love how you make
me sigh
stretch out with me as I try to blow
your mind
Forbidden lover, you'll leave me,
I know,
but for now you are mine to have
and to hold
Forbidden lover, you are all hers
to tow
don't forget me when you leave me
in the cold
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 10 years agoI must admit I like a poem that has a solid, and stable rhythm and rhyme, so there were some stiff parts to this poem where this didn't happen. But I liked the start of each verse being the same. It felt like a 70's Bohemian (I think I'm recalling this right) poetry piece. The repetition is the rhythm. Knowing that I've been involved in forbidden love this poem cuts me to the core, and leaves my open and exposed halves bleeding in the light of day. I know I didn't ever want to leave my lover. But everytime I did I just wanted her more.
mamaval2930over 10 years agoAuthorThanks for the critiques. ...they will help in future writing.
Anonymousover 10 years ago"All hers to tow" is referring to the fact the forbidden lover is a married man and because of this must follow the whims of a wife...The speaker is recognizing the wife's rights over her husband.
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UnderYourSpellalmost 11 years agoWhat does ' you are all hers to tow' mean, has it only been used because it rhymes?
twelveoonealmost 11 years agoto break from the "Forbidden lover", pleasant surprise, no rhyming coups
I try to blow your mind - overused
this is very good effort on organization, try to rid it of things that you heard before
5 but new writer five
