- Erotic Poetry
- Hold Me
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Hold Me
Hold me until the light sky turns dark
Through the night while stars shine,
The moon sends its gentle beams through the curtains
And the birds quieten.
Hold me while we sleep and our breath slows
To an even pace that echoes our hearts beating,
And dreams chase each other
Through our unconscious minds.
Hold me as we wake, each alone even as we embrace
And the night sky lightens to a pale blue,
While the sun creeps above the horizon
And the new day brings the separation that we dread.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 17 years agoGood but this could be better
The imagery could be more bold and sharper, the scene that you have created sounds a little saccharine and cliched. Perhaps using similes and more vivid images would help this
The mood that you have created is, however, spot on
