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hydrothermal venting

bybutters©

in the shower
steaming worlds
moans that spill and run
parted lips
oh
parted lips
passion plays
small deaths and resurrections
calderas bubble
get a grip
inthrust of explosive magma
triggers deep crust tremors
imminent collapse
a naming of names

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by Anonymous

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by Tsotha04/28/14

I'm not entirely sure what works here, but it's like some lines are getting a reaction from me, while others are serving as padding — and I feel padding is important, in this kind of poem, to allow themore...

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by butters12/25/13

thankyou!

glad you liked it. ange and everyone, your feedback shows it worked at some level.

ishtat - do you mean drop 'magma'? i wanted the heat and liquidity, but if it works as well without that word, considermore...

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by greenmountaineer12/24/13

I must admit I actually got excited reading this, butters, and began thinking about.....
Oh, never mind.

This is what erotica should be.

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by ishtat12/24/13

!!

O Seismic.

"Inthrust of explosive." ?

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