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Click hereHypesthesia: (Traced with a Nine)
Last night in blue light's wash and siren's wail,
they traced a boy in chalk down on my street,
with thick, white lines of dust on gray concrete,
boxed in between the hydrant and the mail.
His mother, in her slippers, roared and screamed
up at the God she'd prayed to yesterday
to watch him while she went to earn her pay;
to spare him from the fate she'd feared and dreamed.
He'd hopscotched down this street-- his mother beamed
to see her boy so lively in his play.
But hopscotch chalk will run in summer rains.
Where once the boy would play, he stood and schemed.
He traded sun-lit games for dark night's sway,
and numbers traced in chalk for golden chains.
His pleading mother cried, "Where did I fail?"
Her boy, traced with a nine, there at her feet--
her baby boy, her little man, so sweet.
"Stay home tonight," she'd begged to no avail.
For prayers and pleas are air, and what remains
is dust and chalk and silence for her pains.
Oh mannnn... This is my favorite kind of poem... gutsy and real. Thanks, Mutt
this gave me chills, and almost made me glad I dont have a son
For prayers and pleas are air, and what remains
is dust and chalk and silence for her pains.
the last 2 lines are the clincher, wow, what pain you have shared, incredible :rose:
BT!!!
wow, I liked this one better than the other. A poignant look at slice of life. I love matching modern day issues to classic poetry. You did a good job at catching emotions and that last line, really really cohesive, it brought the whole poem together.