- Non-Erotic Poetry
- I am not a poet
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I am not a poet
my use of emotion is dry, empty
my imagery cliche
my words do not speak to the future
are not a connection to all mankind
my enjambment
random
And use of caps a detraction
my vertical preference clear
my word choice plain
the subjects mundane
perhaps I have rhyme
though not all the time
no anthology will immortalize me
my thought process not tumbled to conformity
within hallowed halls and ivy walls
Therefore
I am not a poet.
- COMMENTS
HarryHillover 10 years agocaught 12. :) lose the my's and the's for the most part I'd edit too: thought process not tumbl'd to conformity' and add some commas, but that's just me and the prosidists would have a field day with it.and I 5ed with the first comment
twelveooneover 10 years agoI know of one, don't bore too much or too often. And fuck, I probably break that one.
but here goes, with this
random is not good, reason is better,
here is your big line:
"within hallowed halls and ivy walls"
which while a cliche, still could be used if something more is done with it, off the top of my head ivy walls are poison to me and
hallowed halls echo in my head
still not good but it takes it one step away, it is incremental, it is all incremental
Your commentors
Poetry has rules?
No it has techniques, processes that generally work, you have one here that you use. It does work on a specific audience. We'll leave it at that.
For your improvement, read the comments on other's carefully. Between the lines.
LesseloovesPeterover 10 years agoAuthorMostly poking fun at the establishment. Why put your poetry "in the box"?
HarryHillover 10 years agoI break the rules constantly so should you.
