tagNon-Erotic PoetryI’ll make you believe

I’ll make you believe

byMrFaithful©

My days are dark, but where are you
I don't know what I have to do
Together I thought we could put things right
But alone it seems I have to fight

My heart cries out, can't you hear
My heart crumbles without you near
What must I do to make you see
That you are the only one for me

I'll give you space, but I wont let go
I'll find a way to let you know
That none fills my heart as much as you
I'll find a way to make you believe it too

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by SweetOblivion04/28/13

You probably need to try to write better poetry for a start

Cliched couplets that stretch the rhyming pattern but not the imagination are not the way to make anyone believe, unless you are seeking a job in writing schmaltz for Hallmark cards. S.O.

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