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Click hereI want to
hold you as an open hand
cups a dove
I want to feel your feathered touch
I want to
be engulfed by your scent like the rain
across the bay
I want to smell your sensual esscence
I want to
frolic and nip like a puppy
and a turtle
I want to roll you over and lick
I want to
taste your passionate fruit and
savor your flavors
I want to kindle your flaming desires
I want to
lay with you like a painting
of two lovers
and I want to!
especially the beginning, some fresh phrasing, delicate. Thanks. Enjoyed.
I enjoyed the visuals here the simple "Want" speaking in terms to all... rain, bay,.. the art of two lovers... and child within turtle and puppy.. all levels of love and erotic entwinings..
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Du~
I can feel your desire through good word choices. Do you think the last line would be more effective without the "and"?
to say that you've surpassed me
I am delighted in your intrest into
poetry bro~ you always wrote great
songs and I am impressed by your
poetry as well, keep up the good
work and waiting on your next
masterpiece <grin>
You have some nice images here. I really like "scent like the rain across the bay." I swear, you can't go wrong with rain or bay. :) And the image of two lovers in a painting is very good, and so is the hand and dove. Notice that all these images seem to fit together? They do. But then you have puppy and turtle, which is fine, though it seems to be a stanza that doesn't quite belong with the rest.