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I wrote a poem
it was a tome
so I threw it out instead
you'd rather not read it
and me, I don't need it
disapproval being widespread

we think we're the tops
but really we're nots
just people bored who write words
you write your stuff
I'll give it no guff
even when it's clearly absurd

if real criqiue you have to offer
I'll gladly throw it in the coffer
but if it's hateful keep it in
no need for that
like a bow for a cat
some writers are really thin skinned

and who are we to judge
what's good and what's fudge
when really we could be whoever
we write what we want
so please do not taunt
even when you think you're so clever

there's no need for hate
we've enough on our plate
it's not like we're trying to win a prize
so keep your feedback
if it's just a wack
at a writer who is bad in your eyes

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freakyfreaky469freakyfreaky469about 11 years agoAuthor

I purposely didn't make this a great poem... barely a passable one... to show sometimes the message is deeper than the presentation... also want to add that the thin skinned writers I know are not here on lit but in the real world.

SweetOblivionSweetOblivionabout 11 years ago
You are right up to a point...

Yes. There is absolutely no point in discouraging others for the sake of it; but, poetry, whatever its guise, needs to have form and consistent rhythm to be even journeyman-like.

And, then, there is that extra special something to make it evoke something in the reader. It can be incredibly hard to capture such a perfect pitch; and it is rare for anything like that to make an appearance amongst us amateurs. (My apologies to anyone here who writes for a living).

A puerile whine about criticism, which, incidentally, is benign here, compared to some other parts of lit, is simply foolish. If people give their time to make positive remarks, then listen - as you seem to indicate you will.

Objectively, your poem needs work to balance it between the caustic wit and the outburst of irritation you clearly feel. Have a look at the syllable count and the rhythm. Excite us with your anger. Amuse us with your wit. Don't just bleat about how unfair it all is.

HarryHillHarryHillabout 11 years ago
Really liked this one

file it under current events; it's sure to be needed again