- Erotic Poetry
- In the dead of night
Note: You can change font size, font face, and turn on dark mode by clicking the "A" icon tab in the Story Info Box.
You can temporarily switch back to a Classic Literotica® experience during our ongoing public Beta testing. Please consider leaving feedback on issues you experience or suggest improvements.
Click hereYou met her in the early hours
You met and took her slowly
The black-faced clouds concealed your lust
But the peeping moon betrayed you
The heavens high above you wept
When fluids of passion washed through the earth
Waves crashed on rocks to hide her cries
Your semen flowed to swell her demon tide of delight
The wind blew hard and your cheating breaths receded
Into the obscurity of the night
You did not hear the footsteps
You did not see the knife
The avenging blade of an angry spouse
Who had watched you take his wife
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 13 years agonow here is a poet that could right any one of you forum hoots under a tableau. A SOLID 5
Epmd607about 13 years agoCuddlyPal, you have yet to submit a categorical 'poem'. You're just submitting sentences in a column. There are elements to poetry that differentiates it from prose. Read the thread in the Poetry Feedback Board entitled: "Prose Poetry is Over"
UnderYourSpellabout 13 years agoI do not consider my comments to be in hectoring tones, if you don't want other peoples honest opinions why are you posting to a public board and leaving your comments box open? Why do you think you know more and write better than anyone else? We are all learning on here from each other and from the comments posted, which on my own I take onboard with good grace something you could learn to do. Make your way to the forum and learn, instead of making out you are above everybody else as you told me by email.
CuddlyAlabout 13 years agoAuthorSurprise, surprise. More spurious observations, this time from the pen of bronzeage. His fatuous comments are both arrogant and disrespectful. His assumptions that the killer falls neatly into his preconceived generalisation shows a basic lack of understanding of the complexity of the human brain. The man in the poem was angry and he committed an act of retribution. I am not averse to criticism but find it difficult to accept from those for whom I have little respect. The substandard efforts of the likes of bronzeage, fridayam and UnderYourSpell fall a long way short of earning even a modicum of respect. Their petty snipings have little direct effect on me but I am concened that their views, particularly when expressed in hectoring tones, will effect others.
bronzeageabout 13 years agoThe technical aspects but not the substance of this piece have been covered very well in previous comments. This is a simple address. The speaker is talking to his victim, who we soon learn is either dead or dying. Cuckoldry is a very old topic and it is hard to bring new words to the subject. This one does not do this and in the process uses the wrong words as well. The spouse is not "angry", he is jealous. There is a difference. He is not "avenging", he is murdering. Since the poem is written in first person, the character can express it in anyway the author likes, but the careful reader will recognize the unreliable words.
