In the midst of blue

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todski28
todski28
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*In the midst of blue*

Laying back sipping my beer,
Undulating movement,
gentle rock, soothing sway
at one with the expanses.

Clouds hang weightlessly,
a tapestry reflects
in twin skies
Colours mix and change
tints, shift and swirl
greens, blues, blacks
mingle meaninglessly

From my side the
horizon punctuates
an exclamation point
on a land mass,

Craggy rocks
Flick up foamy spray
Misting the view
In white vapour

Another sip of beer,
cool, bitter sweet,
let my head lull
with the beat, in this
temperate splendour

tipping, rocking
drunk on beer and
natures beauty
such a lazy Sunday
in this sheer vastness
that caresses continents

todski28
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tazz317tazz317almost 10 years ago
WHETHER ITS SEA, SKY OR LAND

the ability to visualize is never greater, TK U MLJ LV NV

MagnetronMagnetronalmost 10 years ago

Relaxing. I dislike beer, but I was there as well.

pelegrinopelegrinoalmost 10 years ago

"lazying on a sunny afternoon..."

nothing wrong with that... beer is sufficient and description very imaginative, I personally don't want anything "deeper".

5ed.

TrixareforkidsTrixareforkidsalmost 10 years ago
I've seen the twin skies...

On Mirror Lake. I was with you the whole way, just wish I could've had you pass me a beer.

TsothaTsothaalmost 10 years ago

The first time I read this was in the forum. I think it was a different version, though, and I'm not sure whether this is the edit, or the version I read on the forum is an edit. Or maybe I'm just confused.

Anyway. I remember that, the first time I read this, I couldn't tell you were talking about the ocean. I think there wasn't a title, and I don't think there was any mention of beer, either.

I forgot where I was going with this comment. Oh, right. I was going to say that I liked what you said, about the colors' mingling being meaningless. I kinda agree with 1201 here, in that I feel you were halfway through delivering some statement, but the description took over. But then, I'm pretty sure there are poems by twelve, and I, and everyone else that are "just" descriptions. Yo, 12. What's the problem with descriptions? (Alas, he'll never see this question.) Anyway, "mingle meaninglessly"... Reading that line, I feel you were about to tell something *more*, something really deep and meaningful... But then again, beer. :-D

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