In Too Deep

byOldbear63©

Here I read submitted lines
From poets with thoughts of pure gold
That humble the rustic stanzas of mine
With insights and stories well told

But I want to know better these wonderful bards
To understand reasons and purpose
So I try to think under those phrases and words
So deeply I lose sight of the surface

Sigh.

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by Queenelizabeth10/23/13

You do..

Exactly what a poet should do. And a lovely poet you are. Rustic: simple and honest, something I enjoy in your poetry. There is a depth achieved in that.

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by Oldbear6310/23/13

Thanks to all for the really encouraging comments

I need to become more patient - read each one more before submitting. As I re-read I keep seeing things I might say differently. And I need to open my mind more. I have been having great fun on the sitemore...

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by todski2810/23/13

Honest

clear writing can often be better than double meanings and stretched metaphors, stoic, resolute, strong are words I would use to describe your writing, you are better than you may think. the more readingmore...

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by Ashesh910/22/13

Oldbear there's nothing "rustic" about your Poems :

You add to tge Diversity & Versatility of this place , please do not dare to be humble about your poetic output . I feel proud of you as a friend , a fellow Poet & a good Human Being ! 5-ed .

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by Maria239410/22/13

line 3

is really good! and as for understanding, just keep reading. The poets in the forum are awesome and there are some excellent teachers there as well. Keep writing, never give up. The more you write themore...

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