Ind. Est.

bydemure101©

Night comes in verticals: the badly-lit
cast-iron crutches of the hollow halls,
dim areas of lifelessness beyond

the dripping lampposts. Thin, insistent rain
forms shading, white across a field of cold,
grey wetness. Round the arcs the halos drip

their diamonds straight below, and down the road
reflections in the pavement double all
those lines; in here the darkness sickly shines.

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by PandoraGlitters10/22/12

Standout!

This poem mentioned in New Poems Recommendations, well done.

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by twelveoone10/21/12

5ed

tell us more Mr Mathew -Project 356creative- thread time baby, be careful though,
contradicting somewhat Ishtat, but this one
cold,
grey wetness.
does look like a no thought

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by tazz31710/20/12

THE RAINS REFLECTIONS

mirror the topside of the road way. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Desejo10/20/12

This effectively conveys a spooky scene. I am totally stumped the title. To the point where it is distracting. As for the Mathew problem, I'd slam him for taking your poems on whatever site it is hemore...

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by HarryHill10/20/12

for ishtat

I missed the cliche-Z ...could you point them out?

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