- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Inhumanity
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she smiled as she woke
knowing today was HER day
stretching her legs
she turned and began the long
journey toward the light
laughing as she pushed
and shoved her way
into the passage
beginning the twisting dance
that was her destiny
the darkness fading bit by bit
as she whirled and plunged
finally curling into a ball
she burst into the light
seeing the big kindly hands
awaiting her arrival
the cry of joy beginning on her tiny lips
turning to a wail of pain
as she felt herself turned
her leg being pulled from under her
thinking,
this wasn't part of her journey
early as it was
and then the same kindly hands
cut off that leg
and then the other
the screaming in her mind
drowning out all other sound
as her arms were pulled off
then her head crushed
her dance ending
in a pool of her own blood
President Bush signed The Partial Birth Abortion Ban in November, 2003.
There are people who want this Law rescinded.
The way to enlightment is not down this path.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 19 years agoYour last three lines give me the right to leave a critical comment, it was certainly powerful and well written, but you then step away from artistic expression and delve into artistic propaganda.
If you think partial birth abortions are about crushing children's heads in, then you are mistaken. The government's attempt to supercede medical practice by eliminating the right of the doctor to even attempt to save the mother's life if there is a complication and contractions begin, however premature, if there is indication a vaginal birth is proceeding, even if some stop gap measures can be used to save both the mother and baby. The law didn't even affect late term abortions, it just made the deadline earlier, because partial birth abortions of formed fetuses was already illegal. You extrapolate one hypothetical and false case to extend to all cases of abortion, and it's wrong and dangerous to take that stance.
I voted on this poem and gave it a 4, because it was powerful. I disagree with your message, but I think you used it effectively, but I would also like to comment on the last line.
What is enlightenment? When other people determine your course to enlightenment, it's usually not called enlightenment, rather oppression. In this case, it is the right of the mother, child, and doctor to find a path to enlightenment, not our job to use a blanketed generalization to determine the most efficient and moral course of action.
lostandfounderover 19 years agothan what has already been said. This is truly horrifying. A definition of inhumanity.
average ginaover 19 years agoI wasn't sure what this was about until you gave an explanation. Then I wanted to hurl. Sadly enough, this poem could have described so many women in so many underdeveloped countries. So painfully descriptive. An excellent piece.
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Anonymousover 19 years ago....of Bush or pro-lifers but this type of abortion is appalling and barbaric, not just for the horror of the foetus but for the mother. I commend you, Boo, for tackling this subject.
GoddessOfSoulsover 19 years agoBoo! Iam amazed my friend, this sent shivers though me, your perception was so on target that its frightning
speaking for those who can't speak for themselves is a path worthy of you. Iam honored to call you friend
well said *hugs*
