- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Journey
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the joy of you is white like
the pure light of dawn
when the hours of the day
are young and supple to the mind
possabilities endless as eternity
is long and wise
glistening like a rain soaked flower
in the sunny glow i sit at odds with
the thoughts lacking reason within me
search for the non-lie
amid the swirling ideas
twisting your mind
like a hurricane of confusion
the calm quiet eye of the storm
awaits you and i ask only
that we sit the long while
together before the journey
takes us away from here
- COMMENTS
Angelineabout 16 years agoI really enjoyed this poem. Great images. I hope you continue to write and submit poems, and please feel free to join in at the forum if you'd like more feedback on your writing (or just to shoot the breeze and/or flirt with us!).
I do think your poem would benefit from punctuation--and definitely from spell check to correct those typos before everyone reads you. :-)
Your poem was recommended in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read!
