Last Words

byRemec©

I have thought about it, but have given up hope
that anything remains in your soul or heart
besides emptiness. But they say them’s the breaks.

Guess they might be right; you’ve had so many breaks,
second chances and do-overs sparking hope
that you might find space for me within your heart.

That was when I thought you had that sort of heart,
open, loving, and willing to avoid breaks
in others. A wellspring of care as well as hope.

When all is said and done, I hope your heart breaks.

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by pelegrino01/05/14

I agree and sympathize with the sentiments expressed, but empty hearts don't break.
Five, nevertheless!

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by Koba01/05/14

I liked this! The last line packs quite a punch after a bit of equivocating in the first stanzas. Very effective. Well done!

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by UnderYourSpell01/04/14

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A tritina yes? and a good one at that, where the repetitions don't crowd out or detract from the poignancy of the poem

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by greenmountaineer01/04/14

The male equivalent of the "female scorned." I like the fractured grammar of the ending in the first stanza and beginning of the second; felt visceral; wish it continued through the rest of the poem untilmore...

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