tagNon-Erotic PoetryLeo's Corollary

Leo's Corollary

byHarryHill©

If I've hurt you,
I'm sure I have,
I'm sorry;
but do you often see
with backcast eyes
and little sighs
what you meant to me?
I, who traded duty and honor
for family and necessity,
recipes of heartbreak,
unpalatable but eaten,
an unseasoned meal of despair
God, I miss your salt.

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by theognis06/02/13

Harry

I came back to read this poem again, and those last two lines still strike me as being truly exceptional, but I think Angeline actually expressed what I meant to say about the entire poem better than Imore...

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by tazz31705/10/13

DESCRIBING THE INDIVIDUALS TRAIT

have I thought about them all. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by mafia_patriarch05/05/13

Leo's Threnody

A little puzzling, but full of regret. Taz wonders why his comments get scratched. Most of the time they have nothing to do with the story. This latest carpet bombing doesn't help either.

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by Angeline05/04/13

I fived it

I agree with anon about the title, if only because I don't know who Leo is or what his corollary means. So, as a reader, I don't get anything from the title to bring to my understanding of the poem. Imore...

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by Anonymous05/04/13

Harry

I don't care much at all for the title of the poem, or for the first seven lines of the poem, and very little for the next four lines of the poem, but the last two lines are so exceptional I feel compelledmore...

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