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Click heresouls split in half
each searching through timeless dimensions
as the god and goddesses laugh
at the futility of finding the one
special person destined to make you feel
whole, complete, replete,
the aching answer
to the perennial question
why am i here?
for his hands to hold
his eyes to behold
as though his rib was taken
and shaped to create me especially
to fit around his body
his hands perfectly sized
to gently to cup my face
his tongue to lave, nip and lick at
my sweet, tangy essence
and remind me
from where i came
my lips to slide against his mouth
awash in the flavors of him
to taste and remember
to whom i belong
for whom i was made
thank you so much for making the time to share your feedback about my work. it means a lot to me and i appreciate it very much.
I would cut or revise the first, didactic stanza. But the next 2 could stand alone as the entire poem. The rib/hand-cupping lines were especially memorable.
Poetry isn't my normal genre, but I read one of your comments you wrote on a story, and searched out some of your work. I found that if I just read the poem as a story I was missing out of the true feeling of the work, so I reread it several times until I felt the tempo of what you wrote, and then I began to understand the written word. Thanks for the lesson in enjoyment. On another item I just wanted to say WOW as to the picture on your biography page. Sexual but not nasty, with one of the nicest butts. Thanks .......Rich