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Click hereOctobers tears fell all day long.
The first of the month was a clue.
Looking back see all destined to be
as day by day foreshadowing grew.
Dawns grey clouds raced to the west.
Mornings egg was a bloody surprise.
Dead moused door, yard covered hoar,
madness played games in your eyes
Grating rassssp, wetstoned lullaby
you said that the cutlery's dull
sleep at last, night quietly passed
uneventful days came, false lull
Wendesday born crisp and bright,
still dark omens steadily grew.
Bloody white dog; field covered fog
Spider crawled out of my shoe.
Fairyringed white mushroom portal
Opening southwest and then facing.
Compass lined gaze into the haze.
Heart uncontrolled and full racing.
Restless cattle 'cross the field.
Wind swirls grass like a hand.
High in tree white wings I see.
The sight was exceedingly grand.
Charging toward stampeding cattle.
Searching walls of great trees.
Peering ahigh, nothing I spy.
The cattle whirl and then freeze.
Follow pointing bovine gaze
Over the full heads of rye.
Movement of brush, frightening rush
Panicked cattle bolt as do I.
Fearsome inspection windows safety.
What in the world could it be?
Night passed pressed to glass.
Cower here, or just flee?
Mute meditation made sandy eyes.
Choice lost now and forevermore
sleep weary thought no safety bought
Alert eyes closed, lost chore.
Full dark startled eyes open
to the creak of an opening door.
Bone chilling fright, abysmal night
Whispering windstormed fogged floor.
Matte' white wings strobe flashed.
Night came alive with the sight.
Morphing limbs soon entered room.
Shape changed like focusing light
Creature formed pseudo human
Features strange daliesque surprise
Frozen haste dragged to the face
Captured by no known eyes
That's the last thing remembered
Until I woke up in this cage
Airplane'd note send into wind
God help any who find this page
note: please comment
I love the larger poems that are filled to the brim with vivid imagery as this one is. This poem brought a smile to my face and kept it there.
Madness; check!
"Morphing limbs soon entered room.
Shape changed like focusing light"
It's all up Hill from......
was all that true in olden days with dragons and wizards, TK U MLJ LV NV
This clearly took a lot of work, and there are some really neat turns of phrase in it. Spider crawls out of my shoe! iiiick. It's hard to figure out exactly what is going on but that may be the point, since the title is Madnesss. I almost wish the title was alien abduction.
The punctuation is puzzling. I don't really know why you opted to put periods at the end of sentences, and inconsistently at that. And there are at least three instances where apostrophes seem to be missing (October's, dawn's morning's). In some places I think you need to put in commas too.
aha, you're learning
3rd stanza EOL lullaby/dull/passed/ lull, take look at 6
field./ hand./grand./
keep this up
all in all, good choices for EOL
i see what you are trying here, good
Whispering windstormed fogged floor.
whisper of windstorm, fogged floor?