- Erotic Poetry
- Marriage of the Flesh
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My thighs have a story to tell
In fact they never stop talking
As long as I am walking
They spread even more lies while I sit a spell
Whispering in hushed tones so faint
My skin stretches to hear them
Tell with conviction
A tale of hands that once caressed them
Feather like touches lingering here or there
Eyes that undressed
In anticipation of what came next
Hems that barely shielded
The seductions of the wind
They weren't always so agreeable
Separated by pride
Taut with stubbornness
Now on more than one occasion they collide
Slovenly cast aside
They swell with resentment
While reminiscing about days well past their prime
- COMMENTS
jthserraalmost 13 years agoI love the lies your thighs spread and wow, the "hems shielding the seduction of the wind"
the last line seems a bit stretched, I'd recommend cutting "while" and "about" to tighten it up, but otherwise a truly delightful poem.
Well done...
jth : )
simply__mealmost 13 years agogave it a 4
i do like it
i think the writer has huge upside
azzure--i'm a newb too, so don't take it bad, there is so much to learn at the poetry forum
twelveoonealmost 13 years agosaid it, I agree. Suggest free verse. Why? Anyone that can cook up the first stanza, has a gift. Polish it. Make your way to the poetry thread on the bulletin board. A5. Don't take it serious, it's a new writer 5.
simply__mealmost 13 years ago'Hems that barely shielded
The seductions of the wind'
nice line
and a a couple of other phrases in the poem pleased me
the rhyming scheme bugs me due to the inconsistency, and I feel no sense of rhythm when reading the piece
