- Non-Erotic Poetry
- merging
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The true color of your eyes: brown
Though rarely seen by me
This world, your world
Feels their sharp glare
Different worlds, yours and mine
A meeting by chance?
Circumstance?
Two pairs of eyes stemming from a single soul
With only a brief glimpse into your world
Violence
Pain
Storms bleeding with rain
I absorb your words as freely as you give them
I step to you
You step to me
We walk past it and don’t turn back
With both heads lowered
We sense each other but still do not see
Looking through the same windows
Blinking on the rhythm of our shared heartbeat
A single window with two separate visions
One set of eyes searching for the truth
And the other seeing it all to well
I see day, you see night
We see the same at different times
Minds intertwined?
The true color of my eyes: brown
Though rarely seen by you
My soul tells it all but my eyes tell it too
Step into my world as I step into yours
Are we moving forward or backwards?
Standing still?
Lift your head and embrace my brown with yours
The true color of our eyes: brown
Though rarely seen by each other
Like the merging of two hemispheres
We have finally come together as one
I step to you
You step to me
I lift my head and embrace your sharp glare
It burns through the haze
Of this bullshit world
And steps through my windows
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 19 years agoI enjoyed the subject of the work. Some really nice movements here.
RE:
I lift my head and embrace your sharp glare
It burns through the haze
Of this bullshit world
And steps through my windows
Just my thoughts but I would cut the wordiness of this work. It fades with all the stop and go... and the extra rhetoric. I would use some puncturation also to stop the reader, make them pause and reflect on the merging message.
These are just my thoughts and my likes in poetry... but I do find a strength within this work that deserves a mention in the Sunday on Monday reviews.
thank you for the read~
Du Lac~
Jennifer Calmost 19 years agoThis poem blew me away
and very rarely I can
say that.
The joing of two people
coming together as a single
entity. I loved it.
Fantastic Work!
Thank you.
~ J
