- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Mesmer.Eyez
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Faint, blue pools
extracting
the sureness
of the oceans rush
with crystal cool
clarity.
The unearthly
depth of greater
understanding,
Innocent compassion
and his
diamond glints
of soul.
Pristine stars,
and lofty willows,
bow and break-
forever lost.
Let your tide pull me
out to sea,
And leave me breathless
for the next
wave.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 16 years agoKick-ass title, I'm sucker for them and instantly open them up to see what's inside. I like this poem there are some pretty mesmerizing lines in here with a clear theme of imagery carried from stanza to stanza. However, one stanza seems to need a little attention so that it is more clear and that is the third one with the imagery of the willows. While it's lovely, there is doesn't seem to be an element that compliments it in order for the whole piece to read more cohesive to me, though, thank you for submitting it, it's a beautiful poem nonetheless.
Angelineabout 16 years agoBeautiful images! Everything works even though it's a pretty abstract piece on the power of eyes. Love "diamond glints of soul." Great line breaks, too. :)
lobomaoabout 16 years agohow refreshing in the dead dead of winter
to have the sweet taste of a delicious peach
rolling on tongue wave lip tip cresting
drifting back to a moonlight beach
