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Click hereI tuck my daughter in to bed
And meaningless thoughts enter my head
I try to keep the "poor me's" away
Yet they trespass here today
Tears are pushed from my eyes
And yet another part of me dies
How much more can I handle?
My heart is burning like a candle
Here a flame; there a flicker
Then it burns out with a snicker
Give me strength; give me hope
Give me anything to help me cope
I am so tired of crying alone;
Tired of hearing my broken heart moan
Patch the pieces; sew the tear
Send someone who shows some care
This is a really good, emotive poem. I especially liked the last verse where tear can be interpreted in both its meanings and still maintain sense in the structure of the verse. (I think you could find a way out of the rhyming structure to make this an even stronger poem, though.) This poem will be mentioned in the New Poems review thread on the Poetry Feedback and Discussion Forum on the Bulletin Boards.
and despair seems to ooze from your poem, making it all seem so real. Nice read.