- Non-Erotic Poetry
- notes on becoming a man
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(for the boy that wants a father)
first:
shut the fuck up, second:
shut the fuck up.
recognize the difference
between can and should
(like need and want)
and shut the fuck up.
put your hands
in your pockets,
no.
keep your hands
up.
keep your head
Up.
shut the fuck
UP.
understand you are not
maliciously an idiot,
(shut the fuck up)
learn to listen when someone tells you
(shut the fuck up)
you're loved;
love back.
call your mother, respect
your father, remember
everyone else.
give anything away, if you have it;
know the worth
of your giving,
shut the fuck up.
two things:
done.
not done.
done:
what is necessary, what
hurts,
what provides, what
heals,
what grows.
not done:
want,
want,
want,
want.
want is the hungry face
in your belly; its tongue wagging
between your legs.
emotion is not gravity,
you don't have to walk.
no, shut the fuck up,
what you want is a blade
sharp enough to cut
the pain you think
is important,
(shut the fuck
up.)
stop.
your use in this world
will only ever be determined by
your actions.
when i was little, i wanted
an everyday daddy to tell me
what to do when
every choice was hard,
it took a woman to teach me,
i am not important in love,
and also, i am.
it hurts every minute.
being a man
is always like this.
shut the fuck up.
- COMMENTS
twelveooneover 16 years agoI agree with Champ and Ange, however it became boring and a little too whiney. Perhaps one less shut the fuck up a little more speaking up?
"it's hard being a man/
livin' in a garbage can"
- Lou Reed
Angelineover 16 years agoIt really is an amazing construction. The combination of terse language and the offbeat formatting communicates just the edgy, alternating shouty-whispery tone I think you intend. You have a Beats-influenced post-modern rhythm in this (and many of your poems) that works just right for me. :-)
champagne1982over 16 years agothe shape of this concrete poem is brilliant in the way you made me hear the voices. I was cringing by the second: shut the fuck up.
LeBrozover 16 years agoNot a pleasant read though powerfully filled with masculine pain — the sort never spoken of publicly.
