- Erotic Poetry
- Oh Eroticus!
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I wrench you in your nakedness
hold you deep within
press hard against your quickening breath
smother your burnished skin.
F eel me throb around you
E nshroud your ecstatic craze
A rched within my loin
R epressing the primal drench of birth.
Y ou must live!
O h Eroticus!
U nder my facade!
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 19 years ago...your poem works very well regardless of moronic critics un-able to detach their minds from theories about writing and forgetting that all true poetry are elements created to arouse and liberate the senses:
to sit about and talk about 'theory' that would make oh eroticus sparkle becomes useless and missing the point -- oh eroticus works very well becomes sensuality doesn't abide by any 'theory' but dwells within the liberation of the senses ----
oh eroticus works very well for me and for that i think you deeply....
and disregard wind-bags caught up with meaningless details ---
jthserraalmost 20 years agobut I think you overplayed it. I think indenting the lines in the first stanza works well, but standing the beginning letter of each line apart from the word is over the top. Instead of the "I fear you" become an interesting nuance in your poem, it overtakes it, detracting, I think, from what you are saying. I think this one would be better presented if you let us discover your fear instead of slapping us with it. A good poem that, with a small edit in the layout, could really sparkle.
jim : )
