O'Hara

bykillamaiden©

A hard little pain had started in her heart and was traveling up slowly towards her throat where it would become a lump and the lump soon will become
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by todski2811/20/13

interesting stucture

I think the and's in the first and second break the sentences in half
acting like internal enjambment??

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by Oldbear6311/18/13

Nice

You caught the emotion beautifully. I can almost see her lips start to tremble

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by LesseloovesPeter11/17/13

Very descriptive, can almost feel it myself.

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by twelveoone11/17/13

I don't know what this is

but I like it
the sentence travels poetically
and title, enigmatic
5 if you must know

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